What are you thoughts on my song?

I know the last thing people want to do is listen to music that some random dude made on the internet. But all of my friends listen to sh*tty music and don't listen to rock or metal. So I just want some opinions. I made the entire thing on my iPhone. And I know my vocals need work. Just listen

"I know the last thing people want to do is listen to music that some random dude made on the internet"
You're f1cking A right about that.

"And I know my vocals need work."
The music is underwhelming and you need to totally abandon Trap Metal/Nu Metal or whatever it is that you are trying to play and go full death metal.

Your cookie monster growls have a lot of gusto. A schit ton of gusto. They are the strongest part of the music. And they are f1cking strong.

If you can find you a strong guitarist, drummer, and a functional bassist to back you up you could have a band that is on level with someone like Cryptopsy.